Arrange a Cinema Trip
Make plans to see a movie. Write a text message to a friend. Use the model.
Active English Writing Exercise
Active English Writing Exercise
Starter Course 3, Unit 1, Lesson 2
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hi Ellie!
i want to watch a movie on this weekend , the title is hellboy. do you want to watch it with me together on sunday? do you know that i like watching sci-fi and action movie.i don't know if these style good for you.if you like it, after finish our watching , we can eat together.i want go to India restaurant. i know one of them around the cinema, it's a cafeteria.
hope to hear from you soon
take care!
i want to watch a movie on this weekend , the title is hellboy. do you want to watch it with me together on sunday? do you know that i like watching sci-fi and action movie.i don't know if these style good for you.if you like it, after finish our watching , we can eat together.i want go to India restaurant. i know one of them around the cinema, it's a cafeteria.
hope to hear from you soon
take care!
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i want to watch a movie on this weekend , the title is hellboy.
do you know that i like watching sci-fi and action movies.
i don't know if this style is good for you
if you like it, after we finish our watching , we can eat together.
i want go to an Indian restaurant.
Well done, just a few mistakes that I have corrected here. Keep it up!
Very good! I agree with Tashood's corrections.
Capitols, first word in each sentences
Hello!
Good writing! See my revisions here:
"Hi Ellie!I want to watch a movie on this weekend. The title is Hellboy. Do you want to watch it with me together on Sunday? Did you know that I like watching sci-fi and action movies? I don't know if these styles are good for you. If you would like it, after we finish our watching our movie, we can eat together. I want go to an Indian restaurant. I know one of them around the cinema. It's a cafeteria.Hope to hear from you soon,Take care!"
hi Ellie! i want to watch a movie on this weekend , the title is hellboy. do you want to watch it with me together on sunday? do you know that i like watching sci-fi and action movies.i don't know if these (this)style (is)good for you.if you like it, after finish our watching , we(then) can eat together.i (would like to go to an )want go to India restaurant. i know one of them around the cinema, it's a cafeteria. hope to hear from you soon take c9are!
overall this essay was ver good. You made several mistakes, however your overaller idea was comunicatable. Well Done. I'll gove you very high marks for this, 这个作文你写了非常好
1) hi Ellie!
Hi Ellie!
(Capitalize the first letter in a sentence).
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2) i want to watch a movie on this weekend , the title is hellboy. do you want to watch it with me together on sunday?
I want to watch a movie this weekend. The title is Hellboy. Do you want to watch it with me on Sunday?
(Capitalize the title of the movie and put it in italics. Also, capitalize the day of the week: Sunday).
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3) do you know that i like watching sci-fi and action movie.
Do you know that I enjoy watching sci-fi, and action movies?
(Do not use the word like to express pleasure. Also, you are asking a question, so end it with a question mark).
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4) i don't know if these style good for you.
I do not know if this style is good for you.
(I am confused by your sentence here).
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5) if you like it, after finish our watching , we can eat together.
If you enjoy it, we can eat together after watching our movie.
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6) i want go to India restaurant.
I want to go to an India restaurant.
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7) i know one of them around the cinema, it's a cafeteria.
I know there is one close to the cinema; It is a cafeteria.
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8) hope to hear from you soon take care!
Hope to hear from you soon. Take care!
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(Overall you did very good).
very good, i would say "action movies", and "after we finish watching". also, "indian". very good job!