A Congratulations Letter
Write a note to congratulate a friend on a promotion. Use the model.
Writing Model
Hi Bob,Congratulations on your promotion! Let's meet for lunch this week. I want to hear all about your new job!
Best,
Katherine
Active English Writing Exercise
Active English Writing Exercise
Starter Course 3, Unit 2, Lesson 2
Congratulations on your promotion! Let's meet for lunch this week. I want to hear all about your new job!
Best,
Katherine
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Hello my friend,
Congratulations on you taking the first place on the singing competition. You performed very well and your singing skills have greatly improved. I perceived the feelings and emotions through your singing and I was impressed on the song you sung. Let's meet next Monday for discussing about The Way Leads You Get to The Best. I want to know what good idea you have.
Best wishes!
Congratulations on you taking the first place on the singing competition. You performed very well and your singing skills have greatly improved. I perceived the feelings and emotions through your singing and I was impressed on the song you sung. Let's meet next Monday for discussing about The Way Leads You Get to The Best. I want to know what good idea you have.
Best wishes!
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Very good Faylynn. Some minor corrections: Congratulations ON taking the first place IN the singing ... . I was impressed BY the song you sung. Prepositions are difficult little things!
Excellent as usual Faylynn! "Congratulations on YOUR taking first place IN the singing competition." "BY the song you SANG." "about WAYS TO get the BEST OUT OF YOUR SINGING (or 'voice')." "what good IDEAS you have." Continue!
Good start, Faylynn, the second half got a little confusing. Keep working.
I'm not sure exactly what you wanted to say with the phrase "The Way Leads You Get to The Best", so below you'll see my suggestion.
"Hello my friend, Congratulations on you taking the first place in the singing competition. You performed very well and your singing skills have greatly improved. I perceived the feelings and emotions through your singing and I was impressed by the way you sang.on the song you sung. Let's meet next Monday for to discussing about the ways that led you Get to The your best. I want to know what good ideas you have. Best wishes!"
Congratulations on your taking the first place on the singing competition. You performed very well and your singing skills have greatly improved. I perceived the feeling and emotion through your singing and I was impressed by the way you sang the song. Let's meet next Monday to discuss The Way Leads You Get to the Best. I want to know what good ideas you have.
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1. on (you) taking = on taking (taking is gerund noun and is object of preposition on). Whose taking? It was your taking, so on your taking. (your is an adjective here)
2. You said you were impressed "on the song". As a judge, I doubt you were impressed by the song. I think you meant to say you were impressed by how she sang the song (with feeling and emotion). I could be wrong.
3. The title of the song didn't quite make any sense so I deleted Get.
4. In titles of books, movies, articles, etc., short words like a, an, the, of, with, for, by, and, or are not capitalized unless they are the first word in the title. Start paying attention to titles to see what words are not capitalized. Usually articles and short prepositions (maybe 4 letters or less).
5. Usually we say one sings with feeling and emotion (singular form).
I would make these small changes. Very good exercise!
Congratulations on your taking first place in the singing competition.
I was impressed by the song you sang.
Let's meet next Monday to discuss the ways that lead you to get the best results when you sing. I want to know what good ideas you have. ( I think from your profile you are a music teacher, so I think this is what you are asking your friend in the letter.)
Congratulations on you taking the first place in the singing competition. You performed very well and your singing skills have greatly improved. I perceived the feeling and emotion throughout your singing, and I was impressed with the song that you sang. Let's meet next Monday to discuss "The Way That Leads You To Get The Best". I want to know what good ideas you have.
Once again, Faylynn, you have shown that you will attempt new words. Very well done!