A Trip to a Music Festival
Write a note to a friend about a visit to another country. Say where and when you want to go. Use the model.
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Hi Andy,
Would you like to go to Senegal in August? I want to go to WorldMusic 2. It sounds fantastic! The festival is from August 20-29. I'll send you more information.
Ray
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Hi Camilo,
I would like to go to Paris for visit you in March. What do you think? I want so much to visit you and to know Paris. I'd like to walk around the streets of Paris and visit museum and other things. My plans is to visit you on March 24th on my birthday. Do you take me on the airport when I to arrive in Paris and I can to stay in your house for twenty days? I'll send you more information.
Thank you.
your father
Adauto
Submitted over a year ago
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Good job. You mostly have a few issues with prepositions. Also, note the line spacing in letters. You need an extra line after the introduction and again before the salutation.
Hi Camilo,
I would like to go to Paris for to visit with you in March. What do you think? I want so much to visit you and to get to know Paris. I'd like to walk around the streets of Paris and visit the museum and other things. My plans is to visit you on March 24th on my birthday. Do Can you take me on to the airport when I to arrive in Paris? and I Also, can I to stay in at your house for twenty days? I'll send you more information.
Thank you,
Your father Adauto
Hi Camilo,
I would like to come to Paris to visit you in March. What do you think? I really want so much to visit you and to get to know Paris. I'd like to walk around the streets of Paris and visit the/a/ some museum and other things. My plan is to visit you on March 24th, on my birthday. Do Can you get me at the airport when I to arrive in Paris, and can I to stay at your house for twenty days? I'll send you more information later.
Thank you,
Your father- Adauto
A few suggestions I would recommend. Please also keep in mind that there are many ways to say the same thing, and that is why I have said these are "suggestions". You are doing very, very well in your English studies so keep up the good work! map
Very good.
Hi Camilo, I would like to travel to Paris to visit you in March. What do you think of my plan? I want so much to visit you and to know Paris. I would like to walk around the streets of Paris and visit the museums and other places. My plan is to arrive in Paris on March 24th on my birthday. Would you meet me at the airport when I arrive in Paris and then can I stay in your house for twenty days? I will send you more information later. Thank you. your father Adauto