Describe the location of your city and country
Instructions:
Using the vocabulary words from this lesson, describe the locations of your city and country. Which countries are located north, south, east, and west of your country? In which corner of the country is your city located? Describe which cities are located north, south, east, or west of your city.
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About myself.
My name is Anna. I'm forty-one. I was born in Moscow and still live here. I want to tell a few words about my family. It is not large. My family consists of my mother and son. At the time I'm not married. My mother is sixty-one and she is already retired. She is good-looking woman with blond hair, grey eyes and nice smile. Her name is Natalie. My son is twenty-one. His name is Antony. He is a student. Also he has a past-time job.
I live with my son. My flat is on the tenth floor. There are two rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and balcony in it. My mother lives in a house next door.
I work in a bank. I'm an economist. I work every day from 9 a.m. to 6 p.m. except weekends and holidays. I have just an hour for lunch.
I have some free time. The last year I began learning English. I completed Elementary course. I was learning English myself in summer. I read some books and translated them. I want to know English better.
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English Writing Exercise 
About myself. My name is Anna. I'm forty-one. I was born in Moscow and still live here. I want to tell you a few words about my family. It is not large. My family consists of my mother and son. At present I'm not married. My mother is sixty-one and she is already retired. She is a good-looking woman with blond hair, grey eyes and nice smile. Her name is Natalie. My son is twenty-one. His name is Antony. He is a student. He also has a part-time job. I live with my son. My flat is on the tenth floor. There are two rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and balcony in it. My mother lives in a house next door. I work in a bank. I'm an economist. I work every day from 9 a.m. to 6 p.m. except weekends and holidays. I have just an hour for lunch. I have some free time. During the last year, I began learning English. I completed the Elementary course. I was learning English by myself in the summer. I read some books and translated them. I want to know English better.
This is excellent work, Anna. Your standard of English is very good!
About myself: my name is Anna. I'm forty-one. I was born in Moscow and still live here. I want to say a few words about my family. It is not large. My family consists of my mother and my son. Right now I'm not married. My mother is sixty-one and she is already retired. She is a good-looking woman with blonde hair, grey eyes and a nice smile. Her name is Natalie. My son is twenty-one. His name is Antony. He is a student. Also he has a part-time job. I live with my son. My flat is on the tenth floor. There are two bedrooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and balcony in it. My mother lives in a house next door. I work in a bank. I'm an economist. I work every day from 9 a.m. to 6 p.m. except weekends and holidays. I have just an hour for lunch. I have some free time. The Last year I began learning English. I completed the elementary course. I was learning English by myself in the summer. I read some books and translated them. I want to know English better.
I'm guessing that you meant "two bedrooms", it's not clear what sort of rooms you mean. The way you put it looks a bit like "I have 2 rooms - one is a kitchen and the other is a bathroom".
Very, very good!
Hi Ann. This is really verey good. However, you need to make some of the sentences flow more. there are too many full stops!! I will re-write this for you so you can see the difference..... My name is Anna and I am forty one.I was born in Moscow and still live here. I would like to tell you about my family. It is not large, it just consists of my Mother and Son. At this time I am not married. My Mother's name is Natalie, she is aged sixty one, and has all ready retired. She is a good looking woman with blonde hair, grey eyes, and a nice smile. My son is aged twenty one, and his name is Antony. He is a student, but also has a part time job. My son and I live together in a flat on the tenth floor. The flat has two rooms, a kitchen, bathroom and a balcony. And my Mother lives in a house next door to us. I work in a Bank, and I am an economist. I work every day from 9am to 6pm except weekends and holidays. I have just an hour for lunch, but I do have some free time also. I began learning English this year, and I was teaching myself through the summer, by reading books and translating them. I have completed the Elementary course, but I would still like to improve my English. (When you are writing Anna, you need to put the same subject bits together, so for instance when you are referring to your Mother, you need to say everything about your Mother altogether. I hope this makes sense. Brenda
Very good. My comments are
"...I want to tell say a few words about my family." You could say "I want to tell you a few".
"It is not large. My family consists of my mother and my son." Nothing wrong, but an English speaker would probably say "my son"."
"At the time moment I'm not married." Sorry, but "at the time" is not right. At which time ? "At the time I was not married" would be correct, in the past.
"My mother is sixty-one and she is already retired. She is a good-looking woman with blond hair, grey eyes and nice smile. "
"Also he has a past-time job." "He also", not "Also he". I find that hard to explain. I tihnk you mean "part-time",
"I completed Elementary course." There is no need for the capital "E" there."
"I was learning teaching myself English myself in the summer." or
"I was learning English in the summer."
You learn something, but you teach someone (including yourself) something.
Very good Ann, I am impressed. Keep up with your hard work and soon you will be fluent.
Very good. You have had many suggestions for re-writing from other reviewers but I think the important corrections are:
I want to say a few words about my family.
She is a good-looking woman.
He also has a part-time job.
The Last year I began learning English.
I completed the (or: an) elementary course.
I was learning English by myself in the summer.