Describing People and Objects
Instructions:
Describe people and objects, including both singular and plural forms. Use both positive and negative statements. Ex. We are women. We are not men. This is a gold coin. These are not yellow flowers.
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There are three computers in my house . One is my private laptop . I often use it in the evening to learn English , to play games and others do .I have a big laptop for my work . I have to use it with the stronger function to make engineering drawings . It can be running pro-e , SAP etc.
The third one is a desktop . This is my family computer .I just use it to save some files and family pictures . And it can receive some family mail . So these three computers are very important for my family .They are the most important tools for me .
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English Writing Exercise 
there is no big laptop..it is called desktop computer. if you mean that this computer can run a program then you have to say it can run..and great job you are really good
There are three computers in my house. One is a small my private laptop. I often use it in the evening to learn English, to play games, and to do other things.
I have a bigger laptop for my work. I have to use its with the stronger functions to make engineering drawings. It can be running pro-e, SAP, etc.
The third one is a desktop. This is my family computer. I just use it to save some files and family pictures and it can to receive some family mail. So these three computers are very important for my family. They are the most important tools for me.
1. Punctuation: Please do not put a space BEFORE punctuation. Only put one space AFTER punctuation.
Example: Aaa, bbb; ccc. Ddd, eee! Ffff, gggg?
This very simple rule may not seem important to you but improper punctuation is very distracting to an English reader.
2. Usage: "It can run" = "It is capable of running".
3. Usage: If you mention a big laptop, then I expect to hear mention of a little laptop somewhere in your exercise. This is because we would not say "a big laptop" normally unless there is room for misunderstanding. We would just say "a laptop". Since you have a big laptop, there must be a small or little laptop as well.
4. Usage: Since you said you have three computers in your home, the assumption is that they belong to you, so there is no need to say they're private (we would probably say they were personal, not private).
There are three computers in my house. One is my private laptop, which often I use to learn English, to play games and others in the evening. I use a big laptop for my works, which has stronger function to make engineering drawings. It can be running Pro-e, SAP etc. The third one is a desktop. This is my family computer. I only use it to save some files and family pictures, and it can to receive some family mails. So, these three computers are very important for my family. They are the most important tools for me.