Describing Objects
Instructions:
Describe the objects you learned about in this lesson. Use both positive and negative characteristics to explain what they are like. Ex. There are five buildings. Two buildings are green. Three buildings are not green. They are black.
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I just have three square meter place in office to work . There is a laptop in the middle of my desk. There are some new plunge routers on the right of my desk . I spent almost three months to develop them, and next week , it will be running ESL . On the left , there are so many professional handbook ,and the instruction manual of my products , I need them to work .
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Leon, not only are you good at English, you also seem to be a electronic genius! Great work! Check out the corrections below:
I just have a three square meter place in office to work . There is a laptop in the middle of my desk. There are some new plunge routers on the right of my desk . I spent almost three months developing them, and next week I(we?) will be running ESL on them . On the left , there are a lot of professional handbooks and the instruction manuals of my products. I need them to do my work.
I just have a three-square-meter place in my office to work. There is a laptop in the middle of my desk. There are some new plunge routers on the right of my desk that I spent almost three months to develop. them, and Next week it (what is it?) will be running ESL (?). On the left , there are so many professional handbooks, and the instruction manuals for my products. I need them to work.
1. Compound adjectives: When using multiple words as a "single adjective", they are hyphenated and always singular in form. Examples: three-hour trip, four-legged animal, 12-inch ruler, 100-meter race.
2. Unclear: "Next week it will be running ESL."
I am unclear on what "it" represents. Before "it" were mentioned three nouns: laptop, desk, routers. To which of these does it refer? If referring to the routers, then "it" should be "they".
I am unclear on what ESL means also. Is this a computer program?
3. Number agreement: Many = plural = handbooks...manuals
4. Relative pronouns: I changed one sentence to use the relative pronoun "that" to join two sentences to show you one technique that we use to make longer sentences.
For more examples of how to use this technique, visit
http://www.englishlanguageguide.com/english/grammar/relative-pronoun.asp
I only have three square meters space in office to work . There is a laptop in the middle of my desk. There are some new plunge routers on the right of my desk. I spent almost three months developing them. Next week, it will have ESL running. On the left, there are so many professional handbooks, and the instruction manual of my products. I need them to do my work .