Describe Your Home Tools
Instructions:
List some tools that you have at home. What are they? Where did you buy them? How often do you use them? What was the last tool you used and why?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 202, Unit 10, Lesson 5
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Today is december 19th. The weather here is very strange in the last days. Once time the weather is cold and once time the weather is hot. Actually always is raining a lot. The rain have been destroyed the cities and mainly poor population. Many people have been being killed by the strong rain. Unfortunatly the Brazil don't have struture to support the enviroment answer against the humanity greedness. I hope that world change their vision about it and our child can be have best days.
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Ótimo trabalho!
Today is december 19th. The weather here has been very strange in the last few days. Sometimes the weather is cold and sometimes the weather is hot. Actually, it's always raining a lot. The rain has devastated the cities and mainly the poor population. Many people have died as result of the severe rains. Unfortunately the Brazil doesn't have the infrastructure to deal with enviromental catastrophes. I hope for a global change in attitude so that our children can be have better days.
You have made a great job here. Even before the corrections, your text was perfecly understandable. I would like remembering you that I'm a non-native such as you. Pay more attention to the corrections from natives, and keep going ahead.
Today is december 19th. The weather here( The weather HAS BEEN very strange ...= This is other way how you could have written this ) is very strange in the last days. Once time the weather is cold and once time the weather is hot. Actually( In this case I think that the word CURRENTLY would be more appropriate, but I'm not quite sure) always IT is raining a lot( CURRENTLY, IT HAS RAINED A LOT ). The rain has been destroyed the cities and mainly THE poor population.( ... and mainly the poor population has suffered because of the bad weather). Many people have been being killed by the strong rain. UnfortunatEly the Brazil doESn't have struCture to support the enviroment answer against the humanity greedness. I hope that THE world changeS ITS vision ( VIEW?) about it and our childREN can be have beTTER days.
Concordo com o pessoal acima.
December with a big D. The weather here "has been" very strange over the last couple days. One time the weather was cold and another time it was hot. In general, it rains a lot. The rain has destroyed many of the cities and has been harmful to the poor population.
There are several mistakes in your writing, but that was a very complicated paragraph,,so GREAT JOB!!!
Today is december 19th. The weather here is very strange in the last few days. Sometimes Once time the weather is cold and other times once time the weather is hot. However it is mostly Actually always raining a lot. The rain has have been destroyed the cities and but mainly poor population areas. Many people have been being killed by the strong rains. Unfortunatly the Brazil don't have an environmental support strcuture to support the enviroment against natural disasters. What is our answer to against the humanity greedness. I hope that the world would change their vision about it and so our children can be have better best days ahead.
Today is december 19th. The weather here is very strange in the last few days. Some times the weather is cold and some times the weather is hot. Actually it is always raining a lot. The rain have been destroyed the cities and mainly poor population. Many people have been being killed by the strong rain. Unfortunatly the Brazil doesn't have the infrastructure to support the enviroment answer against the humanity greedness. I hope that world change their vision about it and our child can have better days.
Muito bem.
Today is december 19th. The weather here is very strange in the last few days. Once the weather is cold and once the weather is hot. Actually always raining a lot. The rain have been destroyed the cities and mainly poor population. Many people have been being killed by the strong rain. Unfortunatly the Brazil don't have struture to support the enviroment answer against the humanity greedness. I hope that world change their vision about it and our child can have best days.
i have corrected as above
Querida Leia, Dear Leia, Today is december 19th. The weather here is very strange in the last [few] days. [Once][One] time the weather is cold[,] and [once][the next] time the weather is hot. Actually [always is][it is] raining a lot. The rain [have been][has] destroyed the cities and mainly [the] poor population. Many people have been [being] killed by the strong rain. [Unfortunatly the Brazil don't have struture to support the enviroment answer against the humanity greedness.][Unfortunately Brazil does not have the political, economical, and social structures to fight the environmental impact caused by human greed.*] I hope that [world change their][the world changes its] vision about [it][the environment and greed] and our [child can be][children can] have [their] best days [yet]. *Buen observación. Good observation. Buen trabajo. Good work. Buena suerte. Good luck. Joe