My shopping cart
Instructions:
Using the words from this lesson, describe the items that can usually be found in your shopping cart or basket. Include the number of units for each grocery item. Ex: two cartons of milk, some vegetables, a dozen eggs.
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In my shopping basket can be found many things, two cartons of milk, 1 kilo of eggs, 1 packet of nilon and some vegetables and fruits for example tomato and something else. I wrote a little today because of you, to review easier or in another order my empty head tried but couldn't write more things today and these last sentence is just for completing this submission. :)
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English Writing Exercise 
In my shopping basket can be found many things, two packets of milk, one kilo of eggs, one packet of nylon and some vegetables and fruits for example tomato and somethings else. I wrote a little today because of you, to review easier or in the other hand my empty head was empty, so I couldn't write more things today and these last sentence is just for completing this submission. :)
In my shopping basket, many things can be found: two cartons of milk, 1 kilo of eggs, 1 packet of nilon(?) and some vegetables, and fruit, for example tomatos, etc. and something else.
I wrote a little today because of you, to review easier or in another order my empty head tried but couldn't write more things today and these last sentence is just for completing this submission. Below, I show you how to structure your sentences properly.
Corrections and suggestions for this part of your writing:
I wrote a little today because of you. It is not a difficult exercise to review. I tried to write more things, but with an empty head I could not think. Now, I am only writing to complete this exercise.
When writing a list, you can use a colon if the first part of your writing is a complete independent sentence/clause. When you write the itemized list, make certain that the words are all in the same category: nouns, adjective, prepositional phrases, etc.
Never use a colon to separate a preposition from its objects or a verb from its complements.
Correct: John has all the ingredients: minced clams, milk, potatoes, and onions. (The list is preceded by a complete independent clause.)
Incorrect: For their anniversary, they went to: Aruba, Saint Martin, Jamaica, and the Bahamas.
(The colon separates the preposition to from its objects.)
Corrected Sentence: For their anniversary, they went to Aruba, Saint Martin, Jamaica, and the Bahamas.
Incorrect: To make clam chowder you need: minced clams, milk, potatoes, and onions. (The colon separates the verb need from its complements. The words before the colon do not make a complete sentence.)
Correct: To make clam chowder you need minced clams, milk, potatoes, and onions. (No colon needed)
Keep writing! ;-)
Hello Mehdi,
In my shopping basket can be found many things: (use the colon when your list will involve several words each) two cartons of milk; (use the semicolon to separate items within the list) one (don't mix numerals and words) kilo of eggs; one packet of nylon(s?); and some vegetables and fruits. It is awkward to have a list within a list.
I wrote a little today because I wanted you to review some of my work and to get some thoughts out of my head and onto paper. But when I tried to find those thoughts, I couldn't. (I'm trying to write this in your funny style, Mehdi.)
Ed
Hi Mehdi, I can see that your submission has already been corrected by your friends , however no one has pointed out that eggs are prepacked in the supermarkets in cardboard packs of six or twelve and in sizes of small ,medium and large. I like your sense of humour, but I don't think that your head is empty, also we all feel a little lazy at times.Carry on you never stop learning.
There is just one spelling error. It is "nylon" and not "nilon". Before typing out the edited text I would like to mention the follwing points:-
(1) The edition is limited to the end of the list of the grocery items.
(2) Nylon is a type of plastic. From a grocery store, one generally buys items made of nylon. One can get nylon threads or nylon stockings etc. I will assume that you bought a packet of nylon threads.
(3) The word "kilo" implies "kilo grams". Technically it is written as Kg. But eggs are not sold weightwise. They are normally sold unitwise ie per dozen or per half a dozen or even per single unit. About 18 medium sized eggs will weigh 1 Kg.
(4) Instead of some vegetables I would like to mention "some beans and carrots". The phrase "and fruits for example" will be replaced by "fruits such as tomatos and apples." Insead of "and something else", I will say "etc.
So the edited text will be as follows:-
Many things can be found in my shopping basket:
(1) Two cartons of milk (2) 18 eggs. (3) A packet of nylon thread. (4) Some beans and carrots (5) Some fruits such as tomatos and apples etc. etc.
The edited text above covers all which is required as a submission. However you felt like writing something more. It is a good idea for practicing, but you have to make sure that what you write can be easily understood. You wrote only a short text today to make our reviewing task easier. Well thanks a lot. You need not say you had an "empty head" when you wrote the submission.
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Hi Mehdi,
Thanks for asking me to review your exercise, they are always fun to read :D
I think your friends have already given you great advice - I am particularly impressed by Catballou's. I often learn things about my own language on Livemocha!
Mmm? ... I am curious to know what the packet of nylon was for!
Keep up the good work ; )
In my shopping basket can be found many things, two cartons of milk, one and a half dozen eggs, 1 packet of nylon and some vegetables and fruit, such as tomato and some others. I wrote a little today because of you, to review more easily, or alternatively in order my empty head. I tried but couldn't write more things today and these last sentences are just for completing this submission. :)
If I had left it as just one last sentence, then "these" should have been changed to "this".
We treat "fruit" in this context as an uncountable noun, and it therefore does not take a plural form.