Famous Landmarks
Instructions:
Where did you go on your last vacation? Did you see any famous landmarks? What other types of interesting sites did you see?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 201, Unit 7, Lesson 5
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On September 2009 I went to Bali, one of the best island in our country. I went with some travel's friends of mine. We go by bus and we need 26 hours to arrived in Bali, we called it trans Java journey, because we have to pass through some cities in middle Java. We spend 5 days in Bali, we were doing a lot of enjoyable things. Sunbathing, swimming, playing water games, and so on. One of the famous landmark of Bali is, boom Bali 1 monument, it take place near our hotel. We took pictures in front of the monument. It remembering us, how bad the situation in the incident but, the important thing is, we really enjoy the time we had, and learn how the people still have a stable heart to live in Bali.
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one of the best island(s)....(travel) friends...we (went) by bus and we (needed) 26 hours to arrive (to) Bali . we( had) to pass .( we spent )5 days ....it (reminded) us...we really (enjoyed) the time...and( learned) how..
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1.On September 2009 I went to Bali, one of the best island in our country. I went with some 2.travel's friends of mine. 3.We go by bus and we need 26 hours to arrived in Bali, we called it trans Java journey, because we 4.have to pass through some cities in middle Java. 5.We spend 5 days in Bali, we were doing a lot of enjoyable things 6.. Sunbathing, swimming, playing water games, and so on. 7.One of the famous landmark of Bali is, boom Bali 1 monument, 8.it take place near our hotel. We took pictures in front of the monument. 9.It remembering us, how bad the situation in the incident but, the important thing is, 10.we really enjoy the time we had, and learn how the people still have a stable heart to live in Bali.
1. In September... one of the best islands 2. travelled friends (guess you meant your friends who like travelling and travelled a lot) 3. We went by bus... needed 26 hours to arrived at Bali 4. had to... 5. We spent 5 days in Bali, we were doing a lot of enjoyable things 6. ,like sunbathing, swimming, playing water games, and so on. 7. One of ... landmarks 8. It had taken place 9. It has been reminding us that no mater how bad the situation is in the incident but 10. We really enjoyed the time we had, and learnt how the people still have a stable heart to live in Bali.
My version might not be 100% correct, but I tried my best to make it better from a viewpoint as an English learner.