Going Shopping
Instructions:
Describe the last time you went shopping. What did you buy? How much did it cost?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 4
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The last time I went shopping was on Sunday that a week before Chinese New Year. I went to the Berjaya Times Square in the city centre by train. There are crowded passengers in the train which most of them went shopping for Chinese New Year preparations. I reached a mall and started looking around, the decorations inside was very interesting with the red Chinese lanterns and dragon replicas. I was heading to my friend’s boutique at the left corner on the second floor. It is a well-knows boutique in the city for its beautiful and modern clothes. There are many choices of clothes for all functions, and I was looking for a dress to wear on my cousin wedding. I chose a red dress, a blue blouse and dark pants which cost of RM1200.
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The last time I went shopping was on the last Sunday that a week before Chinese New Year. I went to the Berjaya Times Square in the city centre by train. There are were crowds of passengers in the train which and most of them went were going shopping for the Chinese New Year preparations. I reached a mall and started looking around. The decorations inside was were very interesting with the red Chinese lanterns and replica dragons replicas. I was heading to my friend’s boutique at in the left corner on the second floor. (It is a well-known boutique) This boutique is well-known in the city for its beautiful and modern clothes. There are many choices of clothes for all types of functions, and I was looking for a dress to wear on to my cousin's wedding. I chose a red dress, a blue blouse and dark pants which cost of about RM1200.
I am sure you looked very smart!
A few mistakes, but you are really making an effort to write fluid texts now.
The last time I went shopping was on Sunday the week before the Chinese New Year. I went to the Berjaya Times Square in the city centre by train. There were crowds of passengers in the train which most of them were going shopping for Chinese New Year preparations. I reached the mall and started looking around. The decorations inside were very interesting with the red Chinese lanterns and dragon replicas. I was heading to my friend’s boutique at the left corner on the second floor. It is a well-known boutique in the city for its beautiful and modern clothes. There are many choices of clothes for all functions, and I was looking for a dress to wear to my cousin's wedding. I chose a red dress, a blue blouse and dark pants which cost of RM1200.
Good job, Lisa. You always exceed the requirements of the assignment. There was no question about what you were trying to tell us and well done with minor errors.
Lisa, you have made very few mistakes. Thank you for such a vivid description of the mall. See below.
The last time I went shopping was on Sunday that a week before the Chinese New Year. I went to the Berjaya Times Square in the city centre by train. There are crowded passengers in the train which most of them went shopping The train was crowded with passengers, most of them going shopping for the Chinese New Year preparations. I reached a mall and started looking around. The decorations inside was were very interesting with the red Chinese lanterns and dragon replicas.( The decorations of red Chinese lanterns and dragon replicas were very interesting.)
I was heading to my friend’s boutique at the left corner on the second floor. It is a well-knows well-known boutique in the city for its beautiful and modern clothes. There are were many choices of clothes for all functions, and I was looking for a dress to wear on for my cousin's wedding. I chose a red dress, a blue blouse and dark pants which cost of RM1200.
Hey Lisa, I agree with the comments above, keep it up!