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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 201, Unit 8, Lesson 3

Describe your day

Instructions: Using the vocabulary words from the lessons, describe your trip to work or school. How long does it take to get there? How far do you have to go? How much does it cost?

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I have a big family. I have one brother and brother's age is younger than me. and I have two sisters. one sister's age is younger than me. but the other sister's age is order than me. and I also live my house with my grandparents and parents.
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  • Chinese&Turkish...
    Mochapoints: 42945  |  Teacher Score: 22460 (95%)
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    Mochapoints: 42945  |  Teacher Score: 22460 (95%)
    ^ . ^ Good :P ^ . ^
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  • ham11
    Mochapoints: 2459  |  Teacher Score: 2150 (0%)
    I have a big family. I have one brother whose is younger than me. I have two sisters, one sister's is younger and the other sister is older than me plus, my grandparents and parents. We all live in the same house.
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  • Chinese&Turkish...
    Mochapoints: 42945  |  Teacher Score: 22460 (95%)
    Dear Sujin ~ Really you are good student ^ _ ^ But you're go on hard study please ^^
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  • Chinese&Turkish...
    Mochapoints: 42945  |  Teacher Score: 22460 (95%)
    But i give 5 stars because you are make good comment ^_^
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  • Sam
    Mochapoints: 1393  |  Teacher Score: 654 (100%)

    Good job!  I understand what you're writing.  While it's nice that ham11 tried to correct your mistakes, unfortunately, ham11's grammar and spelling are incorrect.  Here is a corrected version of what you wrote:

    I have a big family.  I have one younger brother and two sisters.  One sister is younger than me and the other sister is older.  I also live in my house with my grandparents and parents.

     

    Some suggestions and comments:

    * Remember to capitalize the first letter of any word at the start of a sentence.  I understand you're not used to it in Korean. 

    * Good job spelling the numbers out (one, two) instead of (1, 2) since they are under 10. 

    * Use commas to break up a sentence instead of periods (which end a sentence).  There are many rules for commas. More information is at the following link when you feel ambitious (it is a little advanced and confusing): http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm

     

    행운을!

    (Translation: "Good luck!" I'm just beginning to learn Korean, so I apologize if it doesn't make sense!)
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