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Going Shopping
Describe the last time you went shopping. What did you buy? How much did it cost?
It was the Chinese valentine's day the other day. It was used to call "Qixi's day" by Chinese. My husband and I went to the shopping mall nearby first. He bought a beautiful dress for me. It costed ¥550. It almost took my husband a week's salary! Although it was a little expensive for us. I was still very happy. Passing a flower shop, he bought a bouquet of flowers given to me as a Qixi's Day gift. Then we went to the candy store and bought a box of heart-shaped chocolate. Finally, we went to a restaurant to celebrate our Valentine's Day. What a happy day!
已提交: 2008-08-20 08:09:04
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2008-08-17 07:54:01bob平均分数:
hen hao! It used to be called... It cost ... It almost cost my husband... Although it was a little expensive for us[,] I was... ... a box of heart-shaped chocolates. [rest is perfect!] -
2008-08-17 08:46:55chrisa
Thank bob very much for your help. -
2008-08-17 17:30:50Orlando平均分数:
Chrisa, Bob already mentioned things, he made good observations. One suggestion: the phrase "it almost took my husband a week's salary" try rephrasing it. Something like: "It almost cost my husband a week's worth of his salary." Sounds like you had a great day. Happy Qíngrénjié! -
2008-08-18 11:02:23chrisa
Thank you very much, Orlando. This sentence that you and bob all have talked about have made me a little headache. Now, I understand. Thank you very much. -
2008-08-19 04:48:56Steve
Great job, Chrisa! Here is your writing with some of Bob's changes and some of my own: Yesterday was the Chinese Valentine's day. The Chinese used to call it "Qixi's Day". First, my husband and I went to the nearby shopping mall. He bought a beautiful dress for me. It cost ¥550, almost a week's salary for my husband! Although it was a little expensive for us, I was still very happy. Passing a flower shop, he bought a bouquet of flowers which he gave me as a Qixi's Day gift. Then we went to the candy store and bought a box of heart-shaped chocolates. Finally, we went to a restaurant to celebrate our Valentine's Day. What a happy day! -
2008-08-20 08:09:04chrisa
Thank Steve very much! This is for all of us work. Thanks for all my friends.
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