Famous Landmarks
Instructions:
Where did you go on your last vacation? Did you see any famous landmarks? What other types of interesting sites did you see?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 201, Unit 7, Lesson 5
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I want to write something about my elder brother. He is now studying in Italy. At first, he is a poor student, but then when he went to the university, he have applied for a full-year scholarship succesfully. So i think he is richer now. He is medium height. He is very young, just 25 years old. He was thin,and when he came back from Italy this time,he becomes thinner,because he has to cook himself in Italy.
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ParkerMochapoints: 2445 | Teacher Score: 1988 (0%)I want to write something about my elder brother. He is now studying in Italy. At first, he *was* a poor student, but then when he went to the university, he applied for a full-year scholarship succesfully. So, I think he is richer now. He is medium height. He is very young, just 25 years old. He was thin, and when he came back from Italy this time, he became* thinner, because he had* to cook for himself in Italy. Very good English...you right very well. Just a few mistakes, but, maybe livemocha is too easy for you? Submitted over a year agoTranslate -
Don MooreMochapoints: 263642 | Teacher Score: 261558 (100%)I want to write something about my elder brother. He is now studying in Italy. At first, he was a poor student, but then when he went to the university, he applied for a full-year scholarship succesfully. So I think he is better off now. He is of medium height. He is very young, just 25 years old. He was thin and when he came back from Italy this time,he becomes thinner,because he has to cook for himself in Italy This deviated from the requested exercise but I was captivated by your writing and descriptions. You brought a human touch to it. I was very impressed. Submitted over a year agoSpelling: Proficiency: Grammar: Translate -
ParkerMochapoints: 2445 | Teacher Score: 1988 (0%)
I meant, you WRITE very well! Maybe I need to practice my english!! Also I agree with Don, you made it really interesting to read. Submitted over a year agoTranslate -
edwardMochapoints: 16269 | Teacher Score: 11979 (100%)Great I agree with previous comments. Keep up the great effort. you are doing really well. Submitted over a year agoSpelling: Proficiency: Grammar: Translate -
sundaramMochapoints: 634 | Teacher Score: 50 (0%)very nice, keep on try. first you will understand the question.\ very good Submitted over a year agoTranslate -
shelleytuMochapoints: 895 | Teacher Score: 70 (0%)The theme in English is Vacation Transportation,but the Chinese requests under ,ask student to describe a person.I was puzzled. Submitted over a year agoTranslate
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