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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 102, Unit 4, Lesson 5

Morning Routine

Instructions: Describe your morning routine. Do you drink coffee? Take your car to get gas? Watch TV?

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I usually wake up early but I often stay in bed for a few minutes to recall the dreams first. Later, listen to music while I’m washing. Then drink a glass of warm water before breakfast. I have a very interesting neighbor who is an elderly woman. Almost every morning, I can see her shouting at a tree near the river and the special ritual sometimes lasts for above an hour. The only word I can catch is ‘Shakyamuni’ . As far as I know, some people will believe in religion once they have serious diseases. Religion could not save them from death but maybe it can help to produce inner power. Actually, I have already felt the ‘great power’. Her voice lingers in my ears even though she is not there now.
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  • 夕阳美/April
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    Well done! And it's very interesting.
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  • Mike
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    I had a dream that I was a disciple of of Sakya clan. In this dream, he was presiding over a classroom of the many great beings. I sat by the door taking notes. Shakyamuni is the Buddha's name. Buddhism, can help you control suffering by reducing it or eliminating it. The suffering caused by death can be controlled in this way but you can not escape it. You can not escape illness, death, and old age. I take refuge in the Buddha, the one who shows me the way in this life. :o)
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  • Nannoia,,,
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    really it's very interesting.
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  • olly
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    Excellent submission. Very good English. There was only 1 correction that i can see. Where you write "above an hour" it should probably be "over an hour" Well done... Keep up the great work.. I look forward to your next submission
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  • edward
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    I agree with previous comments. This is a very interesting topic. jia you jia you tai hao le
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  • Here
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    Thank you very much, everyone :-) Hi Michael, thank you for sharing your dream and religion ;-) Hi olly, yes, it should be 'over' not 'above'. I look forward to your next comment ;-)
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  • Dancing Bear
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    In general, the selection is very good. These are my comments. The first sentence sounds a bit unnatural to me because of the use and position of the word “first.” I would say either, “I often stay in bed for a few minutes to remember my dreams” or “first I stay in bed for a few minutes to remember my dreams.” I assume “first” applies to staying in bed. I would put it in that part of the sentence and not with “remembering my dreams.” We feel more comfortable when a sentence has a subject, so I would use “I” before “listen” and “drink.” In the sentence containing “some people will believe in religion.” The use of word “will” seems to be influenced by Chinese grammar. I would say simply, “some people believe in religion…” Actually I, myself, would say, “some people turn to religion when they have a serious illness.” “Believe” is something people do all along, not just when they get sick, but we often refer to them “turning to” religion in times of crisis. “Illness” is a general term. It means any sickness, so I would use it. “Disease” is more specific, an abnormal condition of an organism that impairs normal physiological functioning. I would say, “Religion cannot save them from death.” Use of the present tense, rather than the past, seems more appropriate. The Simple Present is used to express an idea that is repeated or usual. Perhaps religious people talk of “inner power.” I don’t know. I have often heard, however, that they strive for “inner peace,” which seems to be one of the primary functions of religion. There are my opinions. Others may disagree.
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  • Here
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    Thank you very much, Dancing Bear :-) I learn a lot from your comments. 我把您的意见都复制粘贴在文档里，以便经常复习。 非常感谢您的帮助 :-)
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  • Awen
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    Excellent. Here is an audio version of your text.
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  • elizabeth
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    Excellent ! Keep work !
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  • Ken Webb
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    I usually wake up early: but I often linger in bed for a few minutes, thinking about my dreams. Later, I listen to music while I'm bathing. I drink a glass of warm water before breakfast.

    I have a very interesting neighbor, an elderly woman. Almost every morning, I see her  shouting at a tree near the river. Sometimes her ritual lasts for over an hour. The only word I can catch is 'Shakyamuni'. Some people become religious only after becoming seriously ill. Their religion can not save them from death, but maybe their religious faith can give them strength and peace of mind. I have witnessed my neighbor's religious strength, and her voice haunts my ears long after she's gone.
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  • Ken Webb
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    ...early; ...
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  • saher
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    Excellent!

    BEST OF LUCK!
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