A Shopping Trip
Instructions:
Write about the last time you went shopping. What were you shopping for? What did you buy? Who did you go with?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 102, Unit 6, Lesson 4
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The last time I went shopping was last Friday. I went there with a friend of mine, who needed to find a present for her boyfriend.
We stayed at the shopping center for about three hours. The main problem was that it was full of people, which made the search very difficult. Finally, she got a nice cotton t-shirt and a pair of jeans.
We stayed at the shopping center for about three hours. The main problem was that it was full of people, which made the search very difficult. Finally, she got a nice cotton t-shirt and a pair of jeans.
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Very good! Small suggestions follow. Bye!
The last time I went shopping was last Friday. I went shopping with a friend of mine, who needed to find a present for her boyfriend. We stayed at the shopping center for about three hours. The main problem was that it so crowed e, which made the search very difficult. Finally, she found a nice cotton t-shirt and a pair of jeans.
T-shirt. Everything else is correct and in a nice chatty style.
I'm looking for a correction to make. (Your writing is THAT good!) If I had to, I'd suggest: "The biggest problem was that there were SO MANY PEOPLE THAT FINDING ANYTHING BECAME a real problem!...but really, what you wrote is PERFECT!
thanks a lot for your comments!
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