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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 2

Describe People

Instructions: Using the vocabulary words from this lesson, describe what six people (a man and a woman, he and she, you and I) are doing at this moment and what they did some time ago. Ex: The woman is opening the door. The woman opened the door an hour ago.

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At the park I will do different things. I like to go for a walk outsite. If the weather is nice I also like it to sit on a bench and read a book. Sometimes I go with my friends to the park. We play badminton, go swimming and also do a barbecue. But you cannot do the barbecue on every place in the park. There are special areas and sometimes you won't get a place anymore. This is really bad then. I also like to walk through the park if the weather is rainy, windy or snowy.
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  • Crashish
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    Hello Appletree, Excellent job! I'll modify what you have already just to give you something you can study. There are many things I do at the park. For instance, I'll find a bench to sit on and read a book. What I also enjoy doing, is walking through the park. However, I usually only do it on days when it's rainy, windy or snowing. Other times, I go with my friends to the park. We play badminton, go swimming and sometimes we have a barbecue. You're only allowed to cookout in certain areas of the park and space is limited, so you'll need to get to the park early if you hope to find a place. Otherwise, you'll have to wait your turn. Furthermore, if it's really crowed or it's the weekend, you might miss your chance to cookout altogether, which always disappointing. Have a great day! Crashish
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  • Crashish
    Mochapoints: 22025  |  Teacher Score: 5684 (100%)
    Correction: I left out "is." "...which is always disappointing." Crashish
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  • Crashish
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    Correction: I meant to say "crowded" not "crowed."
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  • Appletree
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    Hi, Crashish, Thanks a lot for your help. I copied it.
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  • Yoav
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    It is very good, with couple of small issues: - Your whole paragraph is in the present tense except of the first sentence. It should be "At the park I do different things" - It should be outsiDe and not OutsiTe - Barbecue could be its own verb. So: "We play badminton, go swimming and also WE barbecue" Unlike "Machen BBQ" you just barbecue... same as:" But you cannot (do the) barbecue on every place in the park. " Very good keep it up! Yoav
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