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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 102, Unit 4, Lesson 1

Going on Vacation

Instructions: Describe a vacation you are taking. When and where are you going? What are you going to do?

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I would like to go on holiday to Paris again. It's a wonderful town and there are a lot of monuments to visit. I have just been there but each time is like the first. When you arrive in Paris, you can't believe it's realy. All is fantastic, especially in the old town where the roofs buildings are a blue violet colour similar to sky. Monumental bridges surmount the Senna and it is a very romantic
place in the evening. I look forward to be there to see it again.
I would like to visit the Louvre, the Eiffel tower, the Notre Dame church...and I hope to have time enought .
Maybe I will go there in may, the next year ; do you want to go with me?

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  • traveler
    Mochapoints: 97392  |  Teacher Score: 93021 (99%)
    It's a little better to say I would like to go to Paris again on holiday. (You have to arrange three adverbial phrases.) It's a wonderful city (Paris is too big to be a town, and "town" sounds informal.) When you arrive in Paris, you can't believe it's real. Everything is fantastic, especially in the old city where the roofs are a blue-violet color (colour)like (similar to) the sky. Monumental bridges cross the Seine, I look forward to being (you need a noun here) there to see it again. the Eiffel Tower, Notre Dame Cathedral...and I hope to have time enough. Maybe I will go there in May of next year (or next year in May); Very nice.
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  • ali
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    really buildings' roofs to the sky look forward to being ...go there in May want to come with me
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  • iain492001
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    Bravissimo, Agostino. I wonder what you meant to say "you can't believe it's realy" - perhaps "it's a reality"? "All is fantastic" is OK, but it is better to say "everything is fantastic" Would be easier to say "the roofs of the buildings".........."similar to THE sky" "Monumental bridges CROSS the SEINE" "...to BEING there.." English is a strange language - we would say :- "... the Louvre, the Eiffel Tower, Notre Dame Cathedral ( quest'ultimo senza l'articolo) "... to have enough time" "maybe I will go there next May" (or "in May next year") Buon lavoro ed anche molto interessante. Il tuo vocabulario si aumenta perfettamente e la tua grammatica e` quasi 100%. Continua cosi` Ciao Iain
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  • KathleenVeronic...
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    Wonderful Agostino, When you arrive in Paris you can`t believe it`s REAL. EVERYTHING is fantastic.....similar to THE sky. Maybe I will go there in MAY NEXT YEAR. [I think Paris is a city actually] Excellent work. Kathleen
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  • Arrivederla e g...
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    Brilliant! I would like to go on holiday to Paris again. It's a wonderful CITY and there are a lot of monuments to visit. I have just been there but each VISIT is like the first TIME. When you arrive in Paris, you can't believe it's REAL. EVERYTHING is fantastic, especially in the old town where the roofs OF THE buildings are a blue violet colour similar to sky. Monumental bridges CROSS the SeInE and it is a very A romantic place in the evening. I look forward to RETURNING there to see it again. I would like to visit the Louvre, the Eiffel tower, the Notre Dame church...* I hope to have ENOUGH time. Maybe I will go there in May, ** next year: Do you want to go with me? * "And" isn't necessary here. ** "the is wrong here. The following are only suggestions. "...each VISIT is like the first TIME." "EVERYTHING is fantastic..." "RETURNING there to see ..."
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  • Professor
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    Bravo, Agostino! There's nothing for me to add to the great comments you've already received. Keep up the good work!
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