English Writing Exercise

Your last vacation

Describe your last vacation. Where did you most recently visit on holiday? What activities and attractions can you recommend to other travelers?

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chrisa
Three years ago, I have been to Hainan Island. It is China's second largest island and it is a beautiful place. In beauty, you will forget all the trouble. I love sea sports in Hainan. I have attempted a diving in Yalong Bay. Of course, along with the professional coach under the water. Very much regret that I only had less than 10 meters deep submarine was forced floating on the sea surface. If I could get a better submarine, I will be able to see the beauty of the sea fish, and I can personally feel the soft coral. But I still feel very happy. I also went to the local Minority villages watched folk dance. Hainan's good to eat fruit, especially coconut. In the Hainan will surely go to the ends of the earth. Since ancient times, Chinese people think it is the end of the Heaven and Earth. Now this has become a place where young men and women promise a solemn pledge of love. In the ends of the earth, it indicates that the everlasting and unchanging love. Hainan Island really is a joyful holiday paradise.
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Submitted: 2008-12-05 07:58:00




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  • 2008-11-28 15:56:54
    Orlando
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    Hi Chrisa, I've heard a lot about Hainan, great sights, great food. Sounds like you have confirmed all of it. As to seeing fish, some of my friends tell me that the more colorful fish are close to the surface anyway. Maybe so. As to your grammar, you are starting to put together paragraphs. That is usually a good indication that people are progressing. Notice that you joined phrases with words like "of course" "but" "I also" etc. That's a good sign too. Great job!
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  • 2008-11-29 09:44:50
    borisvian
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    Really good work
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  • 2008-12-05 07:58:00
    chrisa
    Thank you, Orlando's comments, and Thank you, borisvian's attention. I will work hard!
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