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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 202, Unit 10, Lesson 5

Describe Your Home Tools

Instructions: List some tools that you have at home. What are they? Where did you buy them? How often do you use them? What was the last tool you used and why?

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Today january 12th. The weather is cold and cloudy now, becuase it was raining in the morning. Maybe in the afternoon it will be sunny.
I think that tomorrow it will be hot.
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  • wyatt4500
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    Excellent Vanesa!  Today IS January 12th.  The weather is cold and cloudy now BECAUSE it was raining in the morning. (Great!)  I think that tomorrow WILL be hot.  (no 'it' because you already wrote TOMORROW.)

    Good work!
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  • Shari
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    HI, Vanesa.  Today is January 12th.  The weather is cold and cloudy now, and (?) it was raining in the morning.  

    ["Because" indicates causality, but the morning rain did not cause the cold and cloudy weather, right?  They may have coincided (happened at the same time).  Clouds can cause rain, since there must be clouds to have rain.  So, I would not use the construction you chose.  Would it make more sense to write, "It rained this morning, and it is (still) cold and cloudy now"?]

    Maybe in the afternoon it will be sunny.  I think ("that" is optional) tomorrow it will be hot.

    I read this last sentence differently from how wyatt4500 did.  I read "it" to refer to the weather - not tomorrow.  I'd keep the "it."

     

    Well done, Vanesa.

    Shari
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  • Jonathan David
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    "Today is January 12th. The weather is cold and cloudy now, becuase it was raining in the morning. Maybe in the afternoon it will be sunny. I think that tomorrow it will be hot."

    That's fine.

    The "cold and cloudy, because it was raining" is acceptable but a little strange - as Shari said, it implies the rain caused the clouds - but, as you've written "cold" too, it's not so bad (rain can cause coldness).
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  • Edward Jenkins
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    Excellemt Vanessa
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