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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 4

Going Shopping

Instructions: Describe the last time you went shopping. What did you buy? How much did it cost?

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The last time I went shopping was yesterday and just at a supermarket. I went shopping with my mother. I just bought some food. Including bread, milk ,oranges and apples, and some vegetables. It costs me 78 yuan.
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  • wlc
    Mochapoints: 22228  |  Teacher Score: 17814 (99%)

    Very good.
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  • Arvonius
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    The last time I went shopping was yesterday, and it was just to a supermarket. I went shopping with my mother. I just bought some food, including bread, milk ,oranges and apples, and some vegetables. It cost me 78 yuan.

    Dora - this is very good! Two small changes to help you. Please look carefully at them - they  will help you.
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  • kelin
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    I think you have written a good lesson. 

    You need to correct the following:

    I just bought some food. Including bread, milk ,oranges and apples, and some vegetables.

    What is in red is not a sentence.  There is no subject-verb.  This is a phrase.

    "I just bought some food; bread, milk, oranges, apples and some vegetables."

    I have used a colon to correct the sentence.

    http://eslbee.com/sentences.htm    

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  • David
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    Good, I think the other comments cover everything.
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