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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 4

Going Shopping

Instructions: Describe the last time you went shopping. What did you buy? How much did it cost?

Kuma's submission: Average Rating:
I went to shopping for father's birthday present yesterday.
I wanted to buy a model of ship. when I went to there that shop wasn't there already. I have always wanted to buy it at there.
I went to the other shop ,because I had second choice.
but, they also weren't there. The pity of it!!
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  • Bela
    Mochapoints: 1356  |  Teacher Score: 899 (0%)

    Your vocabulary is great, but your sentences formation isn't good. It's confused! Take a look on my suggestion:

    "I went to shopping to buy my father's birthday present yesterday. I wanted to buy a model of ship. When i was there, i discovered the shop, where i would buy the gift, was closed. I've always wanted to buy it there. I've looked for another shop, but there wasn't any other. I was very disappointed!"
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  • katie-rae
    Mochapoints: 345  |  Teacher Score: 205 (0%)

    Your spelling is very good, and overall a good job, but there are a few grammatical mistakes. Here is what I would write:

    "I went shopping for my father's birthday present yesterday. I wanted to buy a model ship. When I went to that shop, the ship wasn't there. I have always wanted to buy it there. I went to another shop, because I had a second choice, but they also didn't have the ship. The pity of it."
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  • Marie
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    Katie-rae comment for you is right. But overall you did a good job! Keep up the good work! ^^
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