Your last vacation
Instructions:
Describe your last vacation. Where did you most recently visit on holiday? What activities and attractions can you recommend to other travelers?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 5
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Memorable vacation. In 2006 I spend a memorable summer vacation. I visited Terra Cotta Warriors and Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes with my colleagues at the 2006 summer vacation. Terra Cotta Warriors is located in Xian.It is the largest underground military museum in the world. It is so majestic. I was deeply shocked. Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes is an east art bright pearl. Its drawing is so charming. Making us to forget return. If you come to China, you should visit the two places.
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When you use words for a title of a written piece, they are capitalized except for the little words like of, the. For example: Memorable Vacation. My Memorable Vacation of 2006.
In 2006 I spent time on a memorable summer vacation. or: In 2006 I had a memorable summer vacation.
.........with my colleagues during the 2006 summer vacation. or: .......during our vacation.
I was deeply impressed. Shocked would more likely be used as: The waiters were rude and I was deeply shocked by their behavior.
......is a bright pearl of eastern art. Its drawings are so charming, making us remember to return. (or: making us never forget to return.)
Nice vacation! : )
Very good practice! You're doing well! : )
A Memorable Vacation. In 2006 I spent a memorable summer vacation. I visited Terra Cotta Warriors and Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes with my colleagues at during the 2006 summer vacation. Terra Cotta Warriors is located in Xian. It is the largest underground military museum in the world. It is so majestic. I was deeply shocked. Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes is an eastern art bright pearl. Its drawing is so charming. Making us to forget return. If you come to China, you should visit the two places.
It is unclear to me what "Making us to forget return" means. It sounds like some kind of Chinese idiom that did not translate well. Or, if CJay interprets it correctly then I support his correction.
Good job!
Memorable vacation. In 2006 I spent a memorable summer vacation. I visited Terra Cotta Warriors and Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes with my colleagues during the 2006 summer vacation. Terra Cotta Warriors is located in Xian.It is the largest underground military museum in the world. It is so majestic. I was deeply shocked. Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes is an eastern art bright pearl. Its drawing is so charming that it made us to forget about return. If you come to China, you should visit the two places.
Memorable vacation. In 2006 I spend spent a memorable summer vacation. I visited Terra Cotta Warriors and Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes with my colleagues at the 2006 summer vacation. Terra Cotta Warriors is located in Xian.It is the largest underground military museum in the world. It is so majestic. I was deeply shocked. Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes is an east art bright pearl. Its drawing is so charming. Making us to forget to return. If you come to China, you should visit the two places.
I was deeply shocked. (surprised)
Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes is a bright pearl of east art . Its drawing is so charming. It makes us engrossed in it's charm.