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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 201, Unit 8, Lesson 4

Describe an area in your city

Instructions: Using the vocabulary words from this lesson, describe a busy street in your city. What kind of buildings and businesses are located on this street? Where are they located?

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I am female, come from China with black hair,black eyes and yellow skin. I just cut a short hair one week ago. Short hair makes me look spirit and professional, and save time to tidy it up. Moreover, Summer is coming, short hair will be cool. But now I have my hair facial in chestnut color though I know it is not healthy for my hair because the chemical subtance of hair dry may be harmful for hair and body. I have to admit the fact that facial hair is very porpular in China .
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  • Doug <大哥>
    Mochapoints: 8442  |  Teacher Score: 7165 (100%)
    I have some difficulty understanding your writing. Please explain what you mean by "hair facial". You may answer in Hanzi. I can translate. Overall your paragraph is very good.
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  • Eddy
    Mochapoints: 56182  |  Teacher Score: 55876 (0%)
    Helen, your writing is excellent. Just for your understanding, the term 'facial hair' refers to hair on the face - like a beard or mustache. I have made some corrections to your writing below. I am female, and I come from China. I have black hair, black eyes and yellow skin. I just cut my hair short one week ago. Short hair makes me look younger and professional, and it saves time for tidying it up. Also, summer is coming, and short hair will be cooler. Now I have my hair in chestnut color; although I know it is not healthy for my hair because the chemical substance of hair coloring may be harmful to the hair and body. I have to admit the fact that colored hair is very popular in China .
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  • helen
    Mochapoints: 1903  |  Teacher Score: 558 (0%)
    Thank you all , Doug and Eddy. Oh, my god. I made a misunderstanding for "facial hair". I have not facial hair,otherwise, it is terrible. haha. "facial" 我们说去"美容"就是去 "facial", so I thought "facial hair" 是美容头发的意思. 哈哈.....
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