English Writing Exercise

Course 101, Unit 1, Lesson 2

Describing People

Using both a positive and a negative characteristic, describe six different people: a woman, a man, a boy, a girl, you and me. Ex. The man is not rich. He is poor.


Adeliine's submission: Average Rating:
The woman is not tall , she is small. The man is not poor , he is rich. The boy is not old , he is young. The girl is not stupid , she is intelligent. You are not thin , you are fat. I am not old , I am young.
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  • H7
    Mochapoints: 5823  |  Teacher Score: 1562 (0%)

    Good job,

    The woman is not tall, she is small short. The man is not poor, he is rich. The boy is not old, he is young. The girl is not stupid, she is intelligent. You are not thin, you are fat. I am not old, I am young.

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  • cuppachino ɐddn...
    Mochapoints: 15192  |  Teacher Score: 8602 (100%)

    What you wrote are considered classic "run-on" sentences. Here's an example:

    The woman is not tall. She is small.

    When you have 2 complete sentences, you must start the second one as an independent sentence, and not simply link them using a comma, even though they are related.

    If you would really like to link them as 1 compound sentence, you must use an appropriate coordinating conjunction, such as: and/or/but/although, etc.

    Another simple solution is to use semi-colon instead of comma to link the 2 sentences:  The woman is not tall; she is small.

    Your work is always tidy with good attention to details. I like that. It shows diligent efforts. Please remember my previous advice about no space before comma.

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  • kalidadverdolag...
    Mochapoints: 7336  |  Teacher Score: 1982 (100%)

    yes. to me all it's ok!!!

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  • angie
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    good

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  • RayguardKnight
    Mochapoints: 17417  |  Teacher Score: 10180 (100%)

    Je suis d'accord avec à 100% avec cuppachino.

    Personellement, dans ce cas je te suggérerais la deuxième option (point-virgule): "The woman is not tall; she is short" (etc).

    <<Juste au cas où vous n'auriez pas compris ses corrections:

    (1) Il n'y à pas d'espace avant une virgule.

    (2) Si vous voulez lier deux phrases simples en tant qu'une phrase composée, vous devez employer le point-virgule au lieu de la virgule.>>

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  • RayguardKnight
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    Désolé, dans mon message précédent je VOULAIS dire, "Je suis d'accord avec cuppachino à 100%"... X(

    Maintenant c'est moi qui fais les erreurs... :P

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  • BEBO
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    good job 

    respect the pronounce rules :D

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  • Prashant
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    she is short

    No space should come between end of a word and ,

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