English Writing Exercise

Describe People

Using the vocabulary words from this lesson, describe what six people (a man and a woman, he and she, you and I) are doing at this moment and what they did some time ago. Ex: The woman is opening the door. The woman opened the door an hour ago.

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Lolochka
I can not ride a bicycle. So I decided to learn it. I and Anton went to the park, where we planned to do my first lesson. Anton helped me a lot: he catched me, when I fell, and gave a mental support. But it was pretty difficult to ride, because everybody watched me, the front brake was broken and there were a lot of old women and I was afraid to hurt them: they spent difficult lives and now I with my crazy bicycle. But everything was allright, like in reggey songs, I met only one tree (it was birch). Anton is very good teacher: he has a plenty of patience and he is very strong and athletic like Ched in "Burtn after reader", but he is also smart (not like Ched).
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Submitted: 2009-05-30 02:34:42




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  • 2009-05-29 16:15:16
    Katie_199
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  • 2009-05-29 17:25:01
    sudsey
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    I can not ride a bicycle. So I decided to learn it( we would say "learn how"). I and Anton went to the park, where we planned to do my first lesson. Anton helped me a lot: he catched caught me, when I fell, and gave a mental (we would say "gave me moral support") support. But it was pretty difficult to ride, because everybody watched was watching me, the front brake was broken and there were a lot of old women and I was afraid to hurt them: they spent had difficult lives and now I was there with my crazy bicycle. But everything was allright, like in reggey reggae songs, I met hit only one tree (it was birch). Anton is very good teacher: he has a plenty of patience and he is very strong and athletic like Ched in "Burtn after reader", but he is also smart (not like Ched).

    Very interesting and amusing!

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  • 2009-05-30 02:34:41
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    I agree with all of sudsey's changes and suggestions, but also:

    Anton and I (never "I and Anton." You will often hear native speakers say "Anton and me," although it's not correct.)

    like Chad in "Burn After Reading" (Brad Pitt's character in the movie)

    Anton is a very good teacher (for occupations use the indefinite article: I am a doctor, he is a scientist, do you know a good lawyer?)

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