English Writing Exercise

Describe an area in your city

Using the vocabulary words from this lesson, describe a busy street in your city. What kind of buildings and businesses are located on this street? Where are they located?

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sheepyoung
The profile picture was took in my grandma's home. I was sitting on the bed. I have a long black hair. l like putting up my hair because long hair make me hot in summer. I have a pair of big eyes( I think so,haha) , medium size mouth and small nose and ears. I am Chinese, so my eyes are brown and my skin is yellow. But I think my skin is fair rather than yellow and it is easy to get a tan.
The clothes that I am wearing is my academical. I studied in Navigation College, so our academical looks like maritime clothes. Certainly we have cap, other pattern academical and belt. You look like a handsome or pretty sailor if you wear the complete set of academical. That's so cool~~
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Submitted: 2009-06-11 14:08:27




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  • 2009-06-11 07:15:35
    claeri

    Very nice job :]

    Here are few corrections...

    "My profile picture was taken in my grandma's home. I was sitting on the bed. I have a long black hair. l like putting up my hair because long hair makes me hot in the summer. I have a pair of big eyes( I think so,haha) , a medium sized mouth and small nose and ears. I am Chinese, so my eyes are brown and my skin is yellow. But I think my skin is fair rather than yellow and it tans easily. The outfit that I am wearing is my uniform. I study in Navigation College, so our uniform looks like maritime clothes. Certainly we have cap, another patterned uniform and a belt. You look like a handsome or pretty sailor if you wear the complete uniform. That's so cool~~"

    I'm not sure if it's different outside of the US, but here we call school outfits "uniforms." It may be called "academical" somewhere else, but I've never heard of that.

    Good work!

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  • 2009-06-11 14:08:27
    Trujillo D
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    Good Job!

     

    The main point is that you can communicate yourself in a clearly way. Claeri has corrected your mistakes already.

    Keep up the good work!

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