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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 5

Your last vacation

Instructions: Describe your last vacation. Where did you most recently visit on holiday? What activities and attractions can you recommend to other travelers?

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I went to Shanghai which is a famous city in my country.What impressed me most is Waitan.I talked with a foreigner and made a picture with her.My friends,if you will have a vacation,welcome to China!
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  • newyork214
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    excellent
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  • Senext Lasser
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    My last vacation was in Shanghai. A famous city located south-east of my country. It's a pretty town for tourist and most foreigners visit every year. There is also Waitan a beautiful city near to Shanghai and I'm always impressed with during my vacation. I would recommend Shanghai as a better place for most tourist and secure place in China.
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  • LEE
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    good!come on!
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  • Rick
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    Good!  A couple of small things:  What impressed me most WAS... you need to stay in the past tense.  Also, we say "took a picture."
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  • zetacon4
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    I like your text for this exercise very much. I found two things I would change.

    1. I talked with a foreigner and made a picture with her. (change the verb "made" to "took". In English, we take pictures. So, you would use the past tense "took" in your sentence.

    2.My friends,if you will have a vacation,welcome to China!

    I would change this sentence as: My friends, if you plan on taking a vacation, come to China.

    You are doing very well.

    Frank
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  • Kevin MH
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    I talked to a foreigner and we took a picture together. If you're going to take a vacation, I would recommend China.
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