English Writing Exercise

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• 2008-08-17 07:54:01

  bob

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  hen hao! It used to be called... It cost ... It almost cost my husband... Although it was a little expensive for us[,] I was... ... a box of heart-shaped chocolates. [rest is perfect!]

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• 2008-08-17 08:46:55

  chrisa

  

  Thank bob very much for your help.

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• 2008-08-17 17:30:50

  Orlando

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  Chrisa, Bob already mentioned things, he made good observations. One suggestion: the phrase "it almost took my husband a week's salary" try rephrasing it. Something like: "It almost cost my husband a week's worth of his salary." Sounds like you had a great day. Happy Qíngrénjié!

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• 2008-08-18 11:02:23

  chrisa

  

  Thank you very much, Orlando. This sentence that you and bob all have talked about have made me a little headache. Now, I understand. Thank you very much.

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• 2008-08-19 04:48:56

  Steve

  

  Great job, Chrisa! Here is your writing with some of Bob's changes and some of my own: Yesterday was the Chinese Valentine's day. The Chinese used to call it "Qixi's Day". First, my husband and I went to the nearby shopping mall. He bought a beautiful dress for me. It cost ￥550, almost a week's salary for my husband! Although it was a little expensive for us, I was still very happy. Passing a flower shop, he bought a bouquet of flowers which he gave me as a Qixi's Day gift. Then we went to the candy store and bought a box of heart-shaped chocolates. Finally, we went to a restaurant to celebrate our Valentine's Day. What a happy day!

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• 2008-08-20 08:09:04

  chrisa

  

  Thank Steve very much! This is for all of us work. Thanks for all my friends.

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