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English Writing Exercise (All Levels)

Course 201, Unit 8, Lesson 5

Directions to your house

Instructions: Using the vocabulary words from this lesson, provide directions for a guest from the nearest bus stop to your house. Which direction should your guest go? Where should he turn? What will he see on his way to your house? How will he recognize your house?

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I am studying in ZunYi medical college which has two campus. One is in guizhou province of China, the other is in guangdong province of China. I studying in guangdong provine. My major was tissue and embryo. I didn't like it. Because it needs many animal experiments which is brutal. I will graduate the next year. I look forward the day.
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  • David Westman
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  • David Westman
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    1) Use the plural of campus - campuses - in the first sentence. 2) Capitalize the names of provinces of China - Guizhou and Guangdong. 3) In the third sentence, you should say "I am studying" 4) You should join the fifth and sixth sentences - "I didn't like it because it needs many animal experiments which are brutal". Notice that you use the plural form "are" because it refers to "experiments". 5) You should say "I look forward to that day" in the last sentence.
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  • AzureWolf
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  • AzureWolf
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    I am studying in ZunYi medical college, which has two campuses. plural of "campus" is "campuses." One is in Guizhou province of China, and the other is in Guangdong province of China. Names are capitalized, so province names should be too! I do not think you need to say "of China" second time, because we know it is China now. One is in Guizhou province of China, and the other is in Guangdong province. I study in Guangdong province. I think you mean "I study" because you wrote "I am studying in ZunYi" but you did not write "am" now. "I am studying" is good too. I didn't like it. It needs many animal experiments which are cruel. "Brutal" is correct, but most common word to use for bad animal experiments is "cruel." I suggest this: I didn't like it because it needs many cruel animal experiments. You can replace "cruel" with "brutal" here. Same meaning. I look forward to the day. Look is verb, forward is direction. Forward? To where? Forward to what/where/when? Foward to the day. Very poetic last sentence! When people are passionate, they say "I look forward to the day." This was a good exercise for you. You are showing how to express your feelings and interests!
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  • wlc
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    David and AzureWolf explain this very well. I have nothing additional.
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  • Jacquie
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    I am studying in ZunYi medical college that has two campuses. One is in Guizhou, a province of China and the other is in Guangdong. I am studying in Guangdong province. My major is tissue and embryo. However, I do not like it because it involves animal experimentation which is cruel. I will graduate next year and I look forward to that day.
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  • wendys_wu
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    I am a boy, is not high is not short, is the middle-aged.
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    I am a boy, is not high is not short, is the middle-aged.
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  • Charley Garrett
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    pengshuxin, Very nice. You've gotten some good advice. My question is about your major. "tissue and embryo"? That doesn't sound right to me. The medical specialty that focuses on tissues is physiology, right? And the one that focuses on embryos is embryology, right? There may be a word choice difference here for English, which is not a direct translation of the Chinese phrase. Charley
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  • John Keithly
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    Consider: I am studying in Zunyi Medical College which has two campuses in China. One is in Guizhou province and the other is in Guangdong province. I am studying in Guangdong province. I have a double major in histology and embryology. I don't like this major because it requires many animal experiments which are brutal. I look forward to the day I will graduate next year. It sounds to me like you are very hard working. But maybe you would have chosen a different field of study if you were to begin again?
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