Your last vacation
Instructions:
Describe your last vacation. Where did you most recently visit on holiday? What activities and attractions can you recommend to other travelers?
English Writing Exercise (All Levels)
Course 202, Unit 9, Lesson 5
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At my last vocation I was in Paris. Paris is a wonderful town. There are many diferents sights. In Paris I have visited the Louvre, the Cathedral of the Parisian Mother of god, the Pantheon, I have taken a walk a the Luxemburg's garden. I have risen to the top of Tour d'Eiffel.Paris is a dream city
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At During my last vocation I was in Paris. Paris is a wonderful town city. There are many diferents seesights. In Paris I have visited the Louvre, the Cathedral of the Parisian Mother of god Notre Dame, the Pantheon, I have taken a walk a in the Luxemburg's garden. I have risen to the top of Tour d'Eiffel.Paris is a dream city
Here are a few corrections, however I'm not a native speaker and I might not have seen all mistakes.
1) I guess Paris is a city and not a town. A town is usually defined as a small city.
2) You don't need translate Notre Dame, I guess everybody knows this place thanx to Victor Hugo.
3) I'm not sure the tenses are correct. Maybe you should write I have visited, I took a walk.
The preterit is often used when an action took place in the past at a certain date or moment. Here it's during your last vacation in Paris. So You should use the preterit and not the present perfect.
4) I have risen to the top of Tour d'Eiffel. Ok I won't talk about this french mistake =) don't write this d'. The verb to rise seems a bit poetic, so it's not incorrect but did you write it on purpose ? Alternatively you can write, I climbed to the top of the Eiffel Tower (or Tour Eiffel) or I have been to the top of the Eiffel Tower.
It is better to say'' Paris is a wonderful city'' ,not town because town means a smaller city.
ON my last VACATION / HOLIDAY I WENT TO Paris. Paris is a wonderful town. There are many diferents sights. In Paris I have visited the Louvre, the Cathedral of the Parisian Mother of god, the Pantheon, I TOOK a walk IN the Luxemburg's garden. I WENT TO the top of THE Eiffel TOWER. Paris is a dream city