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  Original - 2008-06-09 02:55:34

  Hi, Isabelle.
  
  This is very good. One small thing to change is instead of "then", you might say, "I'm a woman and therefore don't have any facial hair", or simply "I'm a woman and don't have any facial hair".
  
  Also, instead of using "I am", it's much more common to use the contraction, "I'm".
  
  But everything else looks great.
  
  And thank you for all your comments on my writing. They are greatly Appreciated.

   

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  maxairspeed - 2008-06-09 03:15:53

  Hi Isabelle,  thank you for all your inputs on my excercises.  I am delighted to return the favor!
  
  Your excercise is very good.  The only thing I might change would be  to use something other than  'then' in the last sentence.  It would be better to say....  "I am a woman so I don't have any facial hair."
  
  Good luck,
  
  Max
  ^..^

   

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  Astudent - 2008-06-09 16:47:17

  Very well done!
  
  Ok, I feel "average height" is a more appropriate word here. Length is a word usually used for things you can lay on ground  and measure like "length of a stick"; "length of a square or rectangle", length of a train, even length of a pole ( and height of a pole)
  
  Bon courage!

   

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  annettepicconi - 2008-06-09 22:18:01

  Very good. You are correct in saying "I have average lenght, auburn wavy hair.  Hair can be measured.  I am a woman so I do not have any facial hair.

   

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  Stevebaz - 2008-06-10 22:49:19

  Having no facial hair, because you are a women !!! - Unfortunately, one does not follow the other, as many women will testify.
  
  I am a lucky women for I have no facial hair.
  
  I consider myself a lucky ...
  
  It doesn’t follow that because I am a women that I have no facial hair. I am one of the lucky ones who is not hirsute.
  
  Cheers Steve
  
  ps Sorry about the delay but it has been a hectic week
  
  

   

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  Stevebaz - 2008-06-11 08:27:35

  “Middle aged” sounds as though you are slopping around in carpet slippers and a pink floral pinny. No, a much better term is “I am a women of a certain age” this gives you experience, allure, sophistication. je ne sais quoi - eh voila! - ooh la la!
  much better.
  
  Cheers
  
  Steve

   

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  kelmarz - 2008-06-12 18:23:10

  Great job Isabelle. I have to agree with Original's comments. You did very well. :)
  

   

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  carmen - 2008-06-15 22:15:01

  great job Isabelle, just the word then should be changed

   

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