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People’s Possessions

Using one positive and one negative attribute, describe six people (a woman, a man, a girl, a boy, you, and me) and the items they have. Ex. The woman’s coins are silver. They are not gold.

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Sweety
When I was a child I lived in a house that was pretty, was painted by blue color and the door and windows were white. There were many roses in the garden, all kind of colors, pink, red, yellow, white, were so beautiful.
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Submitted: 2008-06-14 04:50:44



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  • 2008-07-01 01:33:51
    The Enthusiast

    Excellent description.  I could almost visualize your home. Just a few minor corrections:

    When I was a child, I lived in a house that was pretty.  It was painted blue; the door and windows were white.  There were many roses in the garden.  The roses were so beautiful.  They came in all kinds of colors -- pink, red, yellow, and white.
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