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Describing Objects
Describe the objects you learned about in this lesson. Use both positive and negative attributes. Ex. There are five buildings. Two buildings are green. Three buildings are not green. They are black.
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lisa-s
lisa-s
Mywork is administration,when i was a chit ,i wanted to be a scientist.But it was just a dream ,I hope i can find a work that is i love.
Submitted: 2008-07-18 12:58:11
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Remember to space one space after using the comma and two spaces after using the period.
Also always capitalize the personal pronoun "I".
"My work is administration. When I was a child I wanted to be a scientist. But it was just a dream. I hope I can find work that I love."
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Thank you for your work and allowing me to review this. I have but a few comments on this description which is easily understood.
There are a few minor mistakes. You work within the administration field and you should not start a sentence with the word "but". You might have wished to say:
I currently work as an administrator. When I was a child I wanted to be a scientist, but it was just a dream. I hope I can find work that I love.
Perhaps instead of the word "love" you might like to use "enjoy".
These are simple mistakes and your English will improve with practice. Good work Lisa and well done.
Kind regards,
John