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My town and country.

Recommend activities to tourists in our city or country. What is the best activity or site a tourist should do in your city?

You are a tourist. You want to come to Vietnam. There are various tours in my country.You can choose one suitable for your purpose. If you go here in summer,you should join a sea travel.You will enjoy with lots of beautiful beaches along the coastline of Vietnam.If you like climbing or want to discover cultures of tribe minority people,our guides will take you to Lao Cai province for a long trek to local ethnic villages or an ascent of Vietnam’s highest peak,Fan Si Pan.If it is your honeymoon jouney,you are able to go to Dalat or Sapa where are romatic and peaceful with fresh cool air.You and your partner will take part in the famed “love market” in Sapa or relax at Cam Ly waterfall in Dalat.You can also take a few days trip for sightseeing in big cities like the capital Hanoi in the north or Hochiminh city in the south by tourist car or traditional colorful pedicab.You probably see or hear the sounds of the busy city life. You will be warmly welcomed everywhere.So why don't you visit here right now!
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Submitted: 2008-01-15 04:02:43



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  • 2008-01-15 05:42:08
    Phong
    It's very good.  Pay attention to parallel comparisons (nouns with nouns, adjectives with adjectives, prepositions with prepositions, etc.)
    I capitalize the added words.  Some phrases need removal of words.

    ...If you go here in THE summer, you should join a sea travelING TOUR.
    ...You will enjoy lots of beautiful beaches
    ...want to discover cultures of tribal people
    ...ethnic villages or TO an ascent...
    ...If it is your honeymoon, you should to go to Dalat or Sapa where THERE are PLENTY OF romantic and peaceful ATMOSPHERES AND fresh cool air...
    ...take part in the famOUS “love market” ...
    ...You can also take SHORT day-tripS for ...
    ...welcomed everywhere; so why don't you...
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  • 2008-01-16 02:35:33
    wgeorge
    excellent
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