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At the park.

Describe what you do at the park. Do you play sports? Do you read?

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Giulio
In my town there is any park, but there is a pinewood where we go to play football and volleyball. Many people go to read and to bring their dogs. I go almost never because in winter I'm very busy with my job.
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Submitted: 2008-08-21 09:02:26



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  • 2008-08-21 10:17:48
    Derek
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    In my town there is no park, (or 'In my town there isn't a park').
    I very rarely go in Winter, because in Winter I'm very busy ...
    A good submission Giulio
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  • 2008-08-21 13:48:56
    sharrah
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    'In my town[,] there is [no] park, but there is a pine[ ]wood where we go to play football and volleyball. Many people go to read and to bring their dogs. I go almost never[,] because in winter[,] I'm very busy with my job.'

    Very good.  Commas are tough for native speakers, so don't worry about them.
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  • 2008-08-21 14:21:08
    Glenn
    Very good--see other comments.
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  • 2008-08-21 16:53:04
    iain492001
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    Excellent Giulio.
    I would just change a couple of things :-
    "In my town there isn't a park (or  there aren't any parks)"
    "I almost never go..." or "I seldom go......"
    Well done
    Ciao
    Iain
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  • 2008-08-21 20:18:12
    Ozmund
    The other comments are good for you Giulio. The term "pinewood" or "pine wood"  is not used in this way in English. When we say "pine wood" in English, we are referring to lumber. I'm guessing here to correct you. You might mean a "pine tree," or a series of them which we would call a "grove of pines," or a "pine grove," or "some pine woods." Keep improving!
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  • 2008-08-21 20:38:22
    Rich
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    There is no park in my town, but there is a pinewoods where we go to play football and volleyball. Many people go to read or to bring their dogs. I almost never go because I'm very busy with my job in winter.

    Dictionary.com Unabridged (v 1.1)
    pine·wood    –noun
    1. the wood of a pine.
    2. Often, pinewoods. a forest consisting chiefly of pines.
    American Heritage Dictionary
      1. The wood of the pine tree.
      2. A forest of pines. Often used in the plural.
    (Doesn't seem like a lot of room to play football.)
    As you can see, pinewood is acceptable. Is it what you really meant?
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  • 2008-08-21 21:45:06
    Robert
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    G - couple of things - "...there ISN'T (the contraction for "is not") A park..." or "there aren't ANY parks..."

    You are correct in your use of "pinewood", btw, and your use of "winter" with a lower case "w" is correct.
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  • 2008-08-22 00:47:04
    Rich
    In thinking about the last sentence, it would make more sense if written...

    I almost never go in winter because I'm very busy with my job.
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  • 2008-08-22 02:00:44
    california707
    Giulio,
      I see nothing else that I can correct that hasn't been corrected.  As always continue with english you are doing a great job!
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