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English Writing Exercise

Course 201, Unit 7, Lesson 2

Describe your street

Look outside of your window and describe the movement that is happening on your street. Which direction are the people and the cars moving? How would a guest reach your home from the street?


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My favourite resaturant is on the island,it is very beautiful and surrounded by water. it is in the water, to get there you should go on the island and then servant will take you through the tunnel. The walls are transparent,so you can see the beauty of the sea land,different kinds of sea plants and fish. There are different kinds of corners. For lovers there is very romantic corner,decorated with love signs and music is romantic too,there is also corner for family or for business meeting,for kids and for friends. The music and decoration is different in each corner. It is another world, very unusual one and to tell the true it is just my imagination:) because I think there is no good restaurant in my town.
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  • cuppachino ɐddn...
    Mochapoints: 15192  |  Teacher Score: 8602 (100%)
    You're an exellent writer and your English grammar and spelling are highly competent, so I won't focus too much on specific corrections (there are very few, and you probably already knew them). capitalize sentences. space after comma. to tell the TRUTH true = adjective, truth = noun Instead, I'd spend most of my time giving you general suggestions: First of you, consider using a text editor to write. It saves you time and fatigue when you review, correct quick typos, change spelling and wording, reformat, etc. The text entry box here is brutally frustrating and extremely error-prone, when you can't see more than 1.5 sentences. Copy-paste when you're happy with the final results. Consider using "sections" which is more appropriate for describing the areas of a restaurant, instead of "corners". The term "motif" would be useful here. What you're describing is a restaurant with a unique motif for each section, complete with themed decor and background music, such as: love & romance, family & kids, sci-fi and fantasies, etc. I'd also suggest that you say "the restaurant is UNDER water..." instead of "it is in the water..." because most people would think of that as floating (slightly submerged) and surrounded by water. This is a usage and writing style issue, not a grammatical correction. That surprise twist at the end is a nice touch, and very effective.
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  • cuppachino ɐddn...
    Mochapoints: 15192  |  Teacher Score: 8602 (100%)
    First of ALL, consider...
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  • teona
    Mochapoints: 836  |  Teacher Score: 58 (0%)
    heeyyy great lets go there!!!!!!
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