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Vacation transportation
When was the last time that you went on a vacation? Did you go by car, airplane or ship? Where did you go?
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corinne
corinne
The last time I went on a vacation, was last summer. I went to Crete by plane and stayed there for one week.
Submitted: 2008-04-27 17:23:22
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The comma "," on the first sentence isn't needed so my version is:
"The last time I went on vacation was last summer. I went to Crete by plane and stayed there for one week."
"Last time I went on vacation (or as the British would say: 'Last time I went on holidays') was last summer. I went to Crete by plane and stayed there for one week".
Ricardo C.
"The last time I went on a vacation was last summer. I went to Crete by plane and stayed there for one week."
With the above correction in place, there are technically no syntax errors. However, I will propose the following as a slight improvement in usage and flow:
"My most recent vacation was last summer. I took a plane to Crete and stayed there for one week."
In the USA, there might be this additional colloquial usage:
"My most recent vacation was last summer. I flew to Crete and stayed there for one week."
This would be the way most Americans would capture the same meaning. "I flew" is generally understood to mean "I flew (by plane)". However, there is nothing wrong in saying
"I took a plane" or
even "I flew by plane". The latter is just a little bit redundant because there are only a few ways to fly (e.g. I flew by jet, I flew by airplane, I flew by helicoptor, I flew by glider, I flew by a private jet, I flew by a commercial jet, etc.).
If you definitely needed to specify the method, then either of the basic model phrases would work:
"I flew by jet" or
"I took a jet"
etc.
Mais peut-être vous préférez l'anglais americain contre l'anglais 'de la reine' - 'the Queen's English'. :o)
The coma isn't necessary on your first sentence.
Great job!