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At the park.
Describe what you do at the park. Do you play sports? Do you read?
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corinne
corinne
I don't go to parks very often.
Nevertheless, when I go there, I like walking.
Sometimes, when it's sunny, I bring a book and sit on a bench to read.
Submitted: 2008-04-27 17:31:03
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"I don't go to parks very often. However, when I do go (You can use 'do' here, in an affirmative sentence, to emphasise the verb) I like to walk (I'd rather use 'I like to walk', instead of 'I like walking'. It sounds more natural).
Sometimes, when it's sunny, I bring a book and sit on a bench to read."
Ricardo C.
Yiu can also say "I don't go to park very often.However when I go ,I like to walk.(Nevertheless, when I go there, I like walking.). During sunny days i bring a book and sit on bench to read."
nevertheless
adverb
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession); "although I'm a little afraid, however I'd like to try it"; "while we disliked each other, nevertheless we agreed"; "he was a stern yet fair master"; "granted that it is dangerous, all the same I still want to go" [syn: however]
But "however" and "nevertheless" (and all the others listed in that definition) have a slightly different "feeling", and unless you changed the wording slightly, "however" does sound more right. Whether you choose "nevertheless"or "however", I do agree with the person who said "However, when I do go (You can use 'do' here, in an affirmative sentence, to emphasise the verb)". Since you're saying something contrary to the first sentence, it sounds better to emphasize the verb!
Very good work! I'm giving you 5 stars because there's nothing really wrong, just little nuances of emphasis.