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At the park.

Describe what you do at the park. Do you play sports? Do you read?

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Actually,I am not go to the park generally.But there is a park nearby my house.I see many old people go to do exercises in the park everyday. I think I shold join to them after the old. There is a river neraby my house.I walking on the riverbank after dinner everyday,And there are a lot of people walking on the bank with their dogs.

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Submitted: 2008-05-22 03:01:35

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2008-05-22 03:11:23
Chynna

I do not go to the park generally. But there is a park nearby my house. I see many old people go to do exercises in the park everyday. I think I should join them when I get older.

There is a river nearby my house. I walk on the riverbank after dinner everyday. There are a lot of people walking on the bank with their dogs.

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2008-05-22 03:13:59
Chynna

Very wonderful! You are able to meet practical writing needs and develop your idea very well in simple descriptions. You connect sentences well in the paragraph using basic cohesive elements. I have a few changes for you. You may work on English Grammar, present tense with "generally and every day." Thank you very much for the great submission. Please keep it up. Best wishes to you

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2008-05-22 03:14:37
Chynna

The comments are made in accordance with the assessment standards developed by the American Council on the Teaching of Foreign Languages http://www.actfl.org/files/public/writingguidelines.pdf

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