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Last vacation

Where was the last place you went on a vacation? How far away is it from your home? How much did the ticket cost to get there?

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Ricardo
The place where I went on my last vacation was the São Paulo's city. It's very far away from here where I live. I went by car with some relatives mine, so I didn't need to spend much. Altrough that city isn't a place to tourism I liked.
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Submitted: 2008-01-21 15:46:49



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  • 2008-01-21 20:31:42
    Enni
    good! :) you can say like a city called Sao Paulo. It's very far from my hometown. I travelled  by car with my relatives and that is why I didn't need to spend much. I think that the city isn't for tourists and I didn't like it either. 
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  • 2008-01-22 01:16:07
    vuhoitruong
    it is good
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  • 2008-01-22 03:10:12
    orange
    Last vacation i went to the city which is called Sao Paulo , It is far from my hometown . I travelled by car with my relatives and that's why i din't need to spend much.I think that the city is not for tourists and i didn't like it either.
    very good, come on!
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  • 2008-01-23 00:59:33
    Linda
    Very good.  You could change the last part of the first sentence to " ...was the city of Sao Paulo."  And you could leave out the "here" in "...from where I live."  "...relatives of mine..."  Although the city isn't a place for tourism, I liked it."  You did a great job, Ricardo.
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