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People’s Possessions

Using one positive and one negative attribute, describe six people (a woman, a man, a girl, a boy, you, and me) and the items they have. Ex. The woman’s coins are silver. They are not gold.

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Alejandro
The woman is not tall, she is short. The man's wallet is not white, it is black. The girl's house is not blue, it is red. The boy's car is not red, it is yelow. You are not old, you are young. I'm not fat, I'm thin;
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Submitted: 2008-08-30 04:23:31



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  • 2008-08-30 06:29:26
    ANKUTZA
    :)
    just one small mistake:

    Yellow

    :)good work
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  • 2008-08-30 14:02:32
    Evaldas
    Good work :) Only one error that Ankutza said.
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  • 2008-08-30 14:53:15
    plain_jane
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    Absolutely perfect!  Amazing.  I don't see a problem with the word yellow.  It should not be capitalized.  The only thing I noticed, which is a typo, is that you ended the last sentence with a semi-colon rather than a period.
    Jane
    P.S.  I don't want to sound superior, but I live in the US, and I have lived there all my life.  I am a native speaker.  Plus I do some work as a copy-editor, in which I look for errors in submissions made to a blog.


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  • 2008-08-31 01:24:55
    Lani
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    Excellent!
    The spelling mistake is very minor.... so minor that even a "copy-editor" missed it!! ;)
    I look forward to when my Spanish is as good as your English.
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