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• 2007-12-07 20:30:46

  Chynna
  

  Very wonderful! You are able to meet practical writing needs and develop your idea very well in simple descriptions and narrations. You connect sentences well in the paragraph using basic cohesive elements. The vocabulary, grammar, and style are concise and clear. I have a few changes for you in the following. "I am a student studying in college, and so I go to school everyday except weekend. Sometimes I have classes the whole day, but other times, I have few classes. At the weekend, I usually spend two or three hours in going over lessons, which gives me great return. After finishing my school work, I do many other things such as mountain climbing, playing bing bang or just hanging out around the college." You may work on English coherence, spellings, punctuation and capitalization. Thank you very much for the great submission. Please keep it up. Best wishes to you!

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• 2008-02-10 05:04:40

  Beth
  

  Hello Eddie.
  You write very well. How long have you studied English?
  Please allow me to be very critical, that way you will learn more.
  Sentence 1: Students study, so your first phrase should leave out the word *study* i.e., "I am a student in college", or, more colloquially, "I am in college."
  After a comma, insert one space before the next word.
  A more colloquial way of saying that *you go to school every day except weekends.* would be to say, "I am in school full time."
  Pay great attention to plurals. Chinese people seem to find our English plurals very difficult. In your first sentence, weekend should be plural. You mean *all weekends*, more than one weekend, yes? Then make it plural.
  Second Sentence: *classes the whole day* more colloquially, "classes all day". Do not ask me why *day* would not be plural here. I do not know, but I will think about it for you.
  n.b. [that is Latin, which English uses a lot, it means note this well, literally, nota bene. bene means well or good in Latin.]
  Remember your space after a comma. I shaln't mention that again, ok?
  The word *little* should not be used to describe something that can be counted. Use the word *few* otherwise. Example: A little girl, few girls. A little house, few houses. It is complicated, because when you speak of the length of time of the class, you would say, "A short class". If you mean to say few students in the class, you would say, "A small class". Here I am assuming you mean you have few classes; in number, not very many.
  Sentence 3: Here again is a plural example. Say, "On the weekends". Note I use *the*. It isn't strictly necessary, but just sounds better than, "On weekends"
  What do you mean by "return"?
  Sentence 4: A very good sentence,very advanced. Don't have a space between the word *before* a comma and the comma.
  After the word *thing* use a comma, not a period.
  Oh, and thank you for teaching me a new English word: bing bong. :)
  

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