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I am going to Japan next year. I am going there for my friend's wedding. The airport is in Tokyo, but the wedding is in Kobe. We will go by train from Tokyo to Kobe. The trip takes about five hours. After the wedding, we will go to Osaka by subway for a party. The wedding guests come from all over the world: from China, India, the U.S., Canada, and even Mexico. Of course, many guests will be from Japan.
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Keep it up!
You will have to cut and paste the link because livemocha does not allow you to link directly.
The only other comment I would like to make is that your reading would sound more native like if you did not speak so quickly. English uses a lot of pauses and intonation of the voice when one speaks or reads.
I hope these comments help. Keep up the great work.
sori Anette..
Keep up the god work!
Thanks for comment Sidney..
do you want any companion in your journey? :p
I hope you have a memorable trip!
'I am going to Japan next year for a friend's wedding.'
Since the third and fourth sentences are so closely related you could also combine them like this:
'We will go by train from Tokyo to Kobe; the trip takes about five hours.'
The semicolon (;) is used in place of a period when two sentences are very closely related. It isn't necessary to combine the third and fourth sentences, but it adds variety in the types of sentences, which adds style.
Again, fabulous work. Good luck with your studies!
I will be do that. Go up Turkey next time=)
Thank You..
I gave you five stars! What more can I say?
You had a musical background too...very romantic.....
Don't be affraid to read with loud voice ...you are on the right way
Ich habe here bevor five stars> somebody taked back.. kann man nicht von Backerei s Brot zuruckgeben..
I hope that you keep it up:)
Thank U Sidney,
Your English is very good.
But KIT is right...
keep up doing the good work.
Cheers.
Could say "I'm going to..." - its more colloquial.
(Do not repeat in next sentence - its a stylistic eyesore - sorry!)
"airport is in Tokyo, AND the airport is in Kobe" (fact that Narita is Tokyo does not suggest that wedding should also be in same city!)
Could say: "we will take a train between the two cities" (you already said which ones!)
..the rest is fine.
Sehr gut!
Neil